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Selamat buat tread barunya.Rita supermall in purwokerto, is the capital city of banyumas (goldenwater) with a total population of 1.7 million at present day. This is the second mall by the developer with the first succesful rita supermall in tegal, central java.
Kalimat pertama di introductory paragraph tsb memang agak `vague` dan ' redundant' sehingga cukup mengganggu.Selamat buat tread barunya.
Ada sedikit usul buat kalimat pembuka yg saya quote diatas.
Itu kalau diartikan, yg menjadi ibukota banyumas adalah Rita Supermal, bukan Purwokerto.
Akan lebih baik jika penulisannya: Rita Supermal in Purwokerto, the capital city of Banyumas with a total population of 1.7 milion at present day, is the second mall by the developer after the first successul Rita Supermal in Tegal, Central Java.